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Post by tuffronicus on May 30, 2011 4:20:21 GMT -5
Tonight was rough, For both of us, But you need to stop giving yourself all the gruff, You think I dont care But you know I do
Someone told me life isnt fair well it seems it isnt to you It isnt to me, It isnt to us all, But you in my life... It caught my fall!
If you could see with my eyes, Youd see the life you've given me, You'll see that the trees are green and the birds do sing, My love for you, Its a beautiful scene.
You are my brother, You are my friend So please lets just love one another, And make one another our self too.
Yeah I cant write poetry, I will add more later, its passed 5 am here been up all night helping a friend.
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Post by HelloJello on May 31, 2011 11:22:56 GMT -5
Sounds good so far. You should try experimenting with literary devices a little, I think. It would snazz it up a bit. oAo
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